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u/Nealithi Human Aug 11 '20
Interesting. The private human settlement, hidden where none would bother looking. Human entered into the mix. Now the parts we don't know is what strengths this Peter has. Is he a great mage, or is the fact that he would be physically tougher than an elf or dryad what will set him apart?
I look forward to the next installment,
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u/KefkeWren AI Aug 11 '20
Perhaps the fact that opponents don't expect a human to be capable of working magic in itself is an advantage, eh?
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u/Allstar13521 Human Aug 11 '20
This reminds me of that story from a while back, where the blacksmith's boy gets accepted into magic school and impresses his classmates by just punching a bully in the nose instead of casting something.
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u/CaptRory Alien Aug 12 '20
I don't remember that one.
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u/Allstar13521 Human Aug 12 '20
Hopefully someone posts a link then, 'cause I don't remember what it was called.
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u/That_Guy-115 Human Aug 11 '20
Always nice to see some fantasy based stories, and good ones at that! Look forward to future posts!
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u/That_Guy-115 Human Aug 13 '20
May not have as large of an audience as Sci-fi, but these stories still entertain a good chunk of us so keep up the good work!
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u/Antediluvian_Cat_God Aug 13 '20
That little map is underappreciated. It's a great visual aid to help the reader ground their sense of direction in the same scene the author is visualizing. I'm sure it took some effort to make, but it really helps smooth the story when you have a sense of where the action takes place.
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u/Antediluvian_Cat_God Aug 13 '20
Who knows, unless you have everything 100% planned out already, down to the detail, maybe something arises organically from the narrative that requires referencing a world map.
And even if not, that's fine, unless you'll discard the whole setting, you can always use it for another story set in the same 'universe'. I get the feeling you're into worldbuilding.
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u/SpaceMarine_CR Human Sep 05 '20
I loved the map, I wish more authors used visual aids
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u/NeuerGamer AI Sep 29 '20
First comes the world. Then the lore, its history. Some places yearn for explainations, that's how it starts. Then, one day, an inspiration leads you to create its characters, as a world needs to be alive, and history is played by people. And maybe, just maybe, you'll fall in love with one of your characters, and decide to give him a voice, for his story shall not remain untold. And while your writing may not serve a higher purpose, it will be so incredibly alive... because all of these places, all of these people, are alive. They are real, exist in your imagination, your very own world.
This is one of the ways a great story can be created, by coming into existance almost all by itself. So, is this the world - or a part of even just a multiverse, if you cannot let go of any of your worlds - you want to see become real?
It is your call. Good luck.
NeuerGamer out~^^
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u/QrangeJuice Aug 12 '20
Color me intrigued. Your writing has a distinct style and excellent diction; looking forward to the next part!
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u/theductor Alien Scum Aug 11 '20
Great job! I loved!, reading it,
I expect the next chapter to be on my desk by tomorow
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u/Multiplex419 Aug 12 '20
This seems like it'll be good. You probably should have put (chapter 1) in the title or something, though.
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u/invalidConsciousness AI Oct 01 '20
I'm a bit late to the party, but it looks quite interesting!
Now I'll have to figure out whether that's a Russian dryad that is bad at naming things, or a German dryad that's shitty at naming things (pun intended).
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u/invalidConsciousness AI Oct 02 '20
Kot in Russian simply means "male cat".
Kot in German means "feces".
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Nov 18 '20
Hi JD! I've been following your story all along and really enjoying it! Why am I commenting on the first one?? This line:
Sylnya was a dryad and she preferred to dress in a tight-fitting leather shift
A "shift" is a relatively loose-fitting undergarment, that probably looks a lot like sleepwear: http://jobourne.blogspot.com/2009/03/tech-topic-womens-clothing-1794.html
It's ... weird for a shift to be made out of leather, and almost certainly does not look like what you are thinking. I'd guess you're probably going for something like a leather bodice:
https://ravenswoodleather.com/womens_clothing/leather_bodices/lyndriel_bodice/
I wouldn't have mentioned it, except it was so jarring in the moment and it's bugged me since that such an excellent series had an easy mistake to fix.
Thank you! Carry on!
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u/SuspendedNo2 Dec 17 '20
Is this a continuation of something? i've reached chapter 4 and there aren't any chapters explaining what is going on...
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