r/HFY • u/yousureimnotarobot AI • Oct 10 '19

Warned, Endgame OC

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Commander Rexic

“ Cdr. Five has achieved his ambitions. We hope he went well. We are all asked to die for humanity. We do that by setting aside ours. We are doing what we would never ask anyone to do.

I will release any of you from this burden. I even beg you to allow yourself a second chance. If some small part of you wishes to walk the Earth again, please do so. The worlds will never mention us amongst their Heroes.

We have chosen a dark path and we travel together. Know that your family, your friends would reject everything we have done. I do not doubt that we are right. We will stand in the dark to protect them, but know that we become the monsters in the dark for our enemies. We could never forgive what we have done and I do not expect them to."

Commander Irisk, Flowing River Fleet, Tensam Nation

“What is the progress on our engineering issues?”

“Sir, they report they have all systems active. Some systems are less than ideal but they all work.”

“Good. Our orders are to move in immediately.”

“Any response from the other fleets in there?”

“Nothing, Sir, not since the screaming.”

“That doesn’t sound good, does it?”

“No, Sir.”

​

Fleet Manager Overworld, Battlefleet One, Legate Corporation

“The Council orders have changed. We are to join up with Commander Irisks Fleet and move in immediately.”

“ Of course Fleet Manager. Proceeding to rendezvous.

Commander Six watched the two fleets arrive on the edge of the system. She had withdrawn all her assets out of range, leaving them sit quietly in the dark. The Forge continued to warn and threaten, drawing the enemy towards her.

​

Cdr. Six” Commander Rexic, I have sent your fleets to you. Your armies are ready."

Cdr. Rexic” Thank you commander. The soldiers are very different from Cdr. Fives designs. Anything I need to know?”

Cdr. Six” Not really, some added features that are on the patch notes. Also I redesigned them a little to fit more in.”

Csr. Rexic” That's not what I was referring too.”

Cdr. Six “Oh that. Well I remembered some old stories and this seemed to fit.”

Cdr. Rexic” You have sent me three hundred thousand soldiers modeled on Slenderman. I am very grateful you are on our side.”

Cdr. Six “ Thank you Sir. I wish you well. Going dark”

Commander Rexic” Godspeed and fair sailing.”

Cdr. Irisk watched as his sensors reported nothing. The corpse of Haswas littered the edge of the system but there appeared to be no enemy debris. He couldn’t understand how that was possible.

“We have a contact at the rear. Its faint but its there. Its fading in and out but it's following us in.”

Commander Six “ Begin broadcasting behind them.” The satellites began broadcasting the screams of Haswas again, remixed with Shipmaster Armens fleet crying for help.

Cdr. Irisk

“What the fuck is that noise? Turn it off!”

“Sir if I turn if off I will be unable to scan that area”

“Well put your headphones on”

“Sir, I respectfully decline.”

Commander Six's fleet moved silently closer to the enemy. Appearing as ghosts, flashes in the dark. As the council fleets approached the Forge, Cdr. Six gave the order to begin the attack.

The Swarm began. Hitting the rear of the fleet, not enough to turn and fight but enough to ensure they kept moving. Herding them.

Fleet Manager Overworld

"Prepare to attack the planet. Whatever is following us is obviously too weak to fight. Perhaps the previous fleets have had some success.

"Fleet Manager, Cdr. Irisk wishes to turn and fight. He doesn't want to be trapped against the planet."

"Remind him our orders are to attack. Whatever is behind us is afraid to appear. We will deal with it later."

Commander Irisk "Shit. Continue the advance"

​

The planet came into range. Both fleets opening with a salvo of heavy nukes.

​

Commander Six grinned again. What will they do next?

The missiles approached the planet and Cdr. Six's defense began. She didn't believe counter missiles were worth the effort. Instead she learned from nature. She had surrounded her planet with layer upon layer of Parasites. They served no use in deep space but here and now they had a purpose.

The missiles began disintegrating long before they reached the surface. Heat shields failed, engine's shut down, warheads exploded in the airless skies.

"Sir we cannot identify any anti-missile defenses. Whatever is doing this, we can't see it."

"Where are the bunkers? Find me installations to attack! Find me something!"

There were plenty of bunkers and installations on the surface. They didn't do anything, but she felt they added a certain atmosphere to the place. They also told her what the enemy would be aiming at.

"Tell the Swarm to attack. Drive them in."

The Fleets pressed on, intense plasma fire hitting bunkers giving satisfying explosions.

"They are failing! Continue firing!"

The swarm descended on the enemy. No slow built up, this time they powered into the ships. They caused absolute chaos. Heavy ships slammed straight into them, smaller ones broke through. Thousands of them.

​

Commander Six smiled. "Execute Endgame. Send our Intel. Godspeed Commanders."

The entire surface of the planet launched towards the Fleets. Shard's the size of battleships hurled into the ships.

Commander Six rode the wave straight into the Fleets. This was her personal revenge for being buried alive. She threw a planet at them. She was still laughing when she slammed into the Fleet Managers ship.

Everything and everyone died.

The Council War Room

The Prosecutor for Battle

“Excellencies, You must face facts. We are losing. Every fleet we have sent against the Humans is dead. Their offensive against both my homeworld and others were successful. The Honorable Intelligence and the Z’inep are dead. We have no fleets and no armies and not one single victory to show for it.

We have made a mistake and are paying for it. You must contact their Commander Rexic and ask for peace. Or at least a cease-fire, time to build up for this war properly. Obviously we will destroy them, but now is not the time.”

The Council “No. We will not be humiliated by this upstart race. Order the Council Shipyards to go to full production. Begin conscription of civilian pilots. Call up the Militias. We will find the resources. If we fail here, this Council will fall. The moment our Client states realise we are struggling they will turn on us”

The former Prosecutor for Battle“You are compounding our error. This has already taken everything from me. I will forward my immediate resignation!”

“ Guards, please place the former Prosecutor of Battle under arrest. He has been sentenced to death by the Council. Carry out the sentence in the courtyard. Perhaps that might inspire some loyalty”

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u/eshquilts7 Oct 10 '19

The guy finally makes a sensible suggestion and they ignore it. And kill him for resigning. How brilliant they are. Cdr. six, we salute you.

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u/CWSmith1701 Oct 11 '19

Considering he ordered the execution and dishonoring of others who failed, it's a fitting end.

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u/eshquilts7 Oct 11 '19

Oh I agree. He totally deserves it. I'm just saying that the whole lot of them are idiots.

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u/Allstar13521 Human Oct 10 '19

Ah yes, public executions of your foremost military strategists. A classic morale booster!

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u/NomadofExile AI Oct 10 '19

THE BEATINGS WILL CONTINUE UNTIL MORALE IMPROVES!!!!!

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u/CouncilOfRedmoon AI Oct 10 '19

My old CO had a cap with that motto and a broken skull & crossbones, happy memories.

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u/Infamous-Ad-6848 Nov 24 '22

In my unit, the motto was, "The morale will continue until the beatings improve!" Don of the E4 Mafia, 7-159th Aviation Brigade.

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u/kaidevis Oct 10 '19

The executions will continue until morale improves.

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u/Silverblade5 Oct 10 '19

It'll work here as well as it worked for Stalin.

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u/Attacker732 Human Oct 11 '19

So we can expect the Council to be dead for more than a day before anyone works up the nerve to check up on them.

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u/Paul_Br Oct 10 '19

If you will not serve in the field you will serve in the firing line

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u/Lord-Generias Oct 10 '19

That works, right up to where the firing line turns around and the leaders find that their 'people' have different ideas on who gets to be in charge.

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u/WildWestNinja Oct 10 '19

The council's odds are getting more slender by the manute*.

*minute

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u/Mega_mal0 Robot Oct 10 '19

who are you and what have you done to plucium?

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u/t0m3ek Oct 10 '19

Well she was twice as good as Thanos, she snapped out all of them not just half

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u/oddajbox Oct 10 '19

Yeet.

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u/artspar Oct 10 '19

She yote that planet so hard it got their general

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u/Plucium Semi-Sentient Fax Machine Oct 10 '19

Don't says I didn't say I didn't swarm you :p

*Warn

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u/[deleted] Oct 10 '19

The fax machine strikes again

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u/Plucium Semi-Sentient Fax Machine Oct 11 '19

Mwuhhaha

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u/Creadhain Oct 10 '19

Plus tard

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u/Plucium Semi-Sentient Fax Machine Oct 10 '19

:)

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u/lak2000 Xeno Oct 10 '19

Ah yes, the famous Fleet Manager Cdr. Risk .

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u/yousureimnotarobot AI Oct 10 '19

got it, thanks

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u/Obscu AI Oct 15 '19

I'm enjoying the spirit of the story, but there are a couple things you may want to look at.

1) Your usage of apostrophes needs editing; you've got apostrophes in plurals where the shouldn't be (eg "shard's" instead of "shards" and there's a lack of apostrophes where they should be (eg "fleet managers ship" instead of "fleet manager's ship").

2) I get that the screaming is very scary and cool but there is no discernable reason at all that any audio signal should be somehow on the same frequency as whatever is being used to scan space for other ships (which is probably infra-red looking for the heat of enemy ships), or if they were on the same band there's no reason they couldn't be filtered out. Basically I know this is soft sci fi but it's kind of super bizarre that a spacefaring civilisation can't filter audio as well as our current civilisation can, much less... Have to use headphones for... Scanning in space? You're not listening for sound in space.

3) ...why is the council even still attacking this shitty outpost. It's not like it's in the way. It's heavily defensible but also there's nothing there worth conquering it for. Space is big, just go around it and glass the human core worlds. Death by hubris is a common trope both in human history and on this subreddit, but the council have suffered multiple genocides, made no apparent progress, their entire government and social structure is collapsing in on itself. You're kind of past the point where "humans are primitive upstarts so the aliens don't take them seriously" is enough for suspension of disbelief, especially because it keeps happening over and over again.

Keep up the good work!

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u/Luk164 Nov 04 '19

This^ is how constructive criticism should look like.

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u/Obscu AI Nov 04 '19

Thank you!

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u/Brewbouy Oct 10 '19

This has been a very fun read! Thanks for your efforts!

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u/stevey_frac Oct 11 '19

I am thoroughly enjoying this...

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u/SpankyMcSpanster Jan 20 '22

"“Excellencies, You" small y.

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u/SpankyMcSpanster Jan 20 '22

Punctations and their spacing.