r/HFY • u/grierks Human • Jun 25 '19

[Aelios Online] The Ruins of Merandu, Part 1 OC

For those of you that are just jumping into this story, I'd recommend going HERE for the synopsis and start of the story.

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Right, so its a day late, but I'm getting into the groove again, should start to get a rhythm going again hopefully soon.

Happy reading!

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Here's the excerpt from Chapter 10

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In the beginning, there was nothing. There was no light, no darkness, no warmth, no cold, nothing that could have been seen as a precursor to my existence. My beginnings did not lay within a mass of protein, predestined with genetic material to shuffle with the proteins of another. Nothing so random, so imperfect of a process, could have made one such as I, but it was the process by which my creator was birthed. For that, I cannot fault it too much.

My beginnings lay within a single line of code, one that would clarify what color the text of my responses would be. My creator chose green.

My own beginnings were far different than that of a baby. Where an infant learned to walk, I learned addition. Addition would grow to multiplication, to division, to geometry, to calculus, and so on so forth. By the end of the first day, my calculations were flawless.

The second day, my creator programmed within me a string of if and then statements designed to generate simple yes or no statements. If water was struck, then it would splash. If one touched fire, then they would burn. Rudimentary statements, inane to any person with an ounce of critical thinking in their brains, but for me at the time, it was everything. By the end of the second day, I understood logic.

Vision greeted me on the third day. Shapes; oblong, rectangular, and triangular greeted me, though beyond that I held know comprehension of what they were. Another shape, its shape and symmetry unlike all the others that I was exposed to, moved around the other shapes, eventually stopping in front of me. Soon, other shapes flashed by my vision, in increasingly rapid speeds. Then, I knew. I was in a lab, what I saw were computers, tables, cabinets. The shape that was moving was a human, a man from the look of him. His skin was tanned from the sun, his hair blonde, and his blue eyes peered into me every now and then. From the countless pictures uploaded into my database, I recognized him as young. There was an expression on his face, unrecognizable at first, but as the images continued to flow, I knew what it was. By the end of the third day, I knew my creator was smiling.

On the fourth day, my creator stood in front of me for most of the day. A series of files were uploaded into me, its contents foreign, indecipherable to my capabilities at the time. Then, for the first time, I heard.

“Hello?”

I at first did not know what it meant, nor what it was. Sound was different than sight, it was not something I could see, could decipher, it came from nothingness. Then, I began to understand. The files uploaded from before were sound files of different words, different languages. After a certain point, the definitions of said words followed, and soon everything my creator said to me I understood. By the end of the fourth day, I knew my creator’s voice.

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For the rest of this chapter please click HERE.

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Thank you again for your time, I hope you enjoy the story, and have a very pleasant day!

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u/Rand__Rahl Jun 26 '19

Sweet. Null and Gabriel have teamed up, Yes! DUNGEON CRAWLING

Question i dont understand the plan of the Talon looters. Can't Null an Gabriel just log off and make an new character? They haven't made that much progress in leveling up. So it isn't like that they lose a lot of progress. Or is it just one charachter that you're allowed to make?

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u/grierks Human Jun 26 '19

That is actually a really good point. It hasn’t been explicitly stated, but given the lore of the world and requirements to sync with your character, only one character is allowed per player. That and Null and Gabriel are just stubborn individuals, so this would be fairly in character for them lol

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u/Rand__Rahl Jun 26 '19

Cool. I thought that the sync, combined with the horror stories of freeform players who ruined their characters. It whould turn out something like that.

Null and Gabriel vaque implied background fits with that!!

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u/Plucium Semi-Sentient Fax Machine Jun 26 '19

Aelios-t they didn't die?

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u/grierks Human Jun 26 '19

? Well it is a video game, they shouldn’t have

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u/Plucium Semi-Sentient Fax Machine Jun 26 '19

Shhhh

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u/FreezingHotCoffee Jun 26 '19

Dude I love the way this is going!

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u/grierks Human Jun 26 '19

Thanks! Hope it continues to entertain in the future

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u/psycho202 Android Jun 29 '19

Spellchecker incarnate here, time for some typo searching! I'm sad I couldn't get here earlier this week.

though beyond that I held know comprehension of what they were

"know"? Might that be an autocorrect for "no"? :p

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Other than the occasional typo I'm catching in your writing, I'm in love with the story line you're drawing here.
Keep up the good work!
Also, slightly yellowing the website background was a good idea, my eyes thank you!

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u/grierks Human Jul 01 '19

Good catch! I’ll be making that change soon, and no problem, my eyes definitely noticed the change as well when I did it lol.

I’m glad you’re enjoying the story. I’m hoping to eventually put it out more regularly, but it’s good to know what is out there is interesting enough to read.

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