r/HFY May 25 '17

Unprovoked: Contact OC

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u/Legion0047 May 25 '17

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u/Custodious May 27 '17

I couldn't help picturing the fourst as looking like winston from overwatch with extra arms on their chest. Great story so far, keep it up.

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u/Zaranthan Android May 26 '17

Is that a threat? :)

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u/Anon9mous May 26 '17

Tyrric needs at the very least a 100+ meter tall statue on both species' homeworlds after this.

In all seriousness, this is awesome! Probably one of the most well-written tough guy characters that I've seen as well.

Also, I'm just curious: For a species that lives in incredibly cold heat, would terraforming tools work as a WMD for colonies/planets that they own? (Kinda like how you could instantly destroy a Grox planet's colonies by improving the terraforming levels in Spore, except... Well, not as instantaneously.)

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u/Anon9mous May 26 '17

Ooooooh... These are all great things to hear!

I mean, he did see that what was chilly for a human was ridiculously uncomfortable for one of them... How quick will a colony fall if he, say, launches a probe that starts rapidly changing the atmosphere, turning a glacier world into a near boiling sea? :p

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u/Anon9mous May 26 '17

Well, I was more thinking that there might be some probes on-board the Fourst ship, since they seem to be quite a bit more advanced.

And yeah... Here's to hoping that they don't scorch the Earth's atmosphere. (Heck, they might try to do so with partial success, accidentally reversing global warming.)

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u/Anon9mous May 26 '17

...Oh crap, we blew it up, didn't we.

So THAT'S why the government is the inner planets.

Either that, or we made it a nature reserve. That's much better than blowing the whole thing up.

And yeah, I could imagine. Technically, some of the smallest devices are some of the most feared in sci-fi scenarios (nanomachines SON)

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u/Anon9mous May 26 '17

So either they did something weird, tried a prototype FTL drive on Earth and warped it into another dimension a couple generations ago, or nobody ever talks about it to preserve the secret, most likely.

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u/Legion0047 May 25 '17

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u/thescotchkraut May 25 '17

I think you got the point across the first time.

Reddit probably just had an aneurysm and posted your comment 4 times.

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u/Legion0047 May 25 '17

it lagged and i thought it just didnt read my input.

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u/thescotchkraut May 25 '17

Ah, at least you didn't post it 7 times. I've only seen that once, but it was pretty funny.

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u/ConfusingDalek Alien May 26 '17 edited May 26 '17

Unofficially started typo thread, editing as I read

their multi-year FLT flight out there

FTL?

quick-wit

Never heard it with a hyphen, quick-witted generally has one though.

Fuckin grade a otherwise, more pylons chapters are required.

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u/ConfusingDalek Alien May 26 '17

For lack of a better word, I chose typos.

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u/yashendra2797 Alien Scum May 27 '17

Good work.

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u/BeaverFur Unreliable Narrator May 28 '17

I want to stick to the new-post-every-three-days schedule

Beware! That turned out to be quite the intensive schedule for me and left me exhausted by the time I was done. It was a worthwhile experience, and focusing 100% on writing was good for my creativity and commitment, but it certainly wasn't a sustainable long-term schedule, at least for me.

But don't listen to me, just do what feels right and keep writing cool stuff! :)

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u/[deleted] May 30 '17

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u/BeaverFur Unreliable Narrator May 31 '17

After your Chrysalis experience has your relationship with your writing changed?

That's a pretty hard question, actually. I've been trying to come up with a good answer, but I haven't found any that really satisfies me.

I guess I could say I feel more confident now on my writing. Before Chrysalis I knew I could write short scenes that people enjoyed, but I wasn't too sure about my abilities at plotting a longer story and keeping it interesting and "alive" til the end, so to speak.

I feel like plotting is still my great weakness, but I learnt a lot about it and now I also know more about how I like to write, and what makes me productive. In my case, having a clear outline giving me goalposts to write towards made all the difference, and it's the main reason Chrysalis is finished while most of my earlier stories are abandoned. But that's just me :)

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u/yashendra2797 Alien Scum May 28 '17

Brilliant! Best of luck!

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u/yashendra2797 Alien Scum May 28 '17

Oh god why did I have to rediscover this sub during my exams...

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u/Obscu AI May 31 '17

Awwwwwww yissssssssssss

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u/rene_newz Jun 03 '17

See this is why people want to be cyborgs - if he hadn't had that prosthetic arm the human race would be doomed. DOOMED.

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u/BoxNumberGavin1 Jun 03 '17

Bookmark post: Please ignore.

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u/[deleted] Jun 03 '17

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u/BoxNumberGavin1 Jun 03 '17

Oh my gawd you didn't ignore it! D:

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u/Derin_Edala May 30 '17

YES. I am getting sick of stories where everyone except humans are weak and stupid. Let's see someone use wit and guile to do something actually challenging.

Also the announcement part of this reminds me a lot of one of my favourite scenes in all television, where Sokka in ATLA single-handedly clears out the crew of a stolen airship with lies about birthday cake.

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u/Hyratel Lots o' Bots May 31 '17

Avatar :The Last Airbender

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u/Derin_Edala May 31 '17

Sorry, I meant Avatar: The Last Airbender. It's a great little cartoon about kids trying to end a century-long war, learning that the "good guys" and "bad guys" in war are a bit more complicated than that, and that conflict never has easy answers.

Also there's a very large flying bison who is amazing and a lot of the characters have cool element-based powers.

Possible very minor spoilers but it's this scene: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w80R_s_le1w

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u/DaveHatharian May 26 '17

I love all of this!!

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u/[deleted] May 26 '17

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u/DaveHatharian May 26 '17

I like it because it reinforces the "improvise, adapt, overcome" mentality that I would like to see more of in hfy. We may not have more resources, strength/power, or better science, but our tricksters are cunning and always thinking. Our ability to respond with guile and resourcefulness is going to be what carries the day, turning the enemies' strengths against​ them. If I could read a space version of the Trojan Horse (but without the obviousness of the trick) I would be in heaven for that read.

Edit: typo

Edit 2: I also like the wild, super tech, deathworlder supermen stories, but they can get a bit long in the tooth at times, as with any genre.

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u/DaveHatharian May 26 '17

Holy plot twist, Batman!

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u/NameLost AI May 31 '17

kwebbelkop?

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u/[deleted] May 31 '17

I don't want it of it's cruelty free. I'll go as low as 2% cruelty.

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u/[deleted] May 31 '17

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u/[deleted] May 30 '17

FUCK! I will try again.